I love how you reacted to the essay question. That is exactly how I felt when I got to it. I scrolled down to see the entire test and when I saw the essay question I felt my entire body groan. I like how you started off with a thesis, that serves as a great outline, and is often what I do, so that I know where I am going in the essay. If I don’t, I tend to ramble, and then make several points that may or may not be related to each other.